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Sketch Studio / The amazing adventures of Adaline & Lightning
« on: December 01, 2019, 11:37:09 PM »
I've been putting together concept sketches for a graphical novel recently. It really isn't much at the moment, but I figured I'd share what I have if anyone is interested.
I'll try to put the pages up in page order, but when they aren't, I'll add to the contents below so they're all in order.

The amazing adventures of Adaline & Lightning

Premise-A child uses her imagination, and takes her teddy bears on 'adventures'.
-Along the way she uses the teddy bear to help others, as it morphs into objects to help her.
-She befriends new people, and learns about her strengths and weaknesses, then learns important lessons.


{Two}Lightning character summary.
{Three}Lightning mug shots.
{Four}Lightning facial features & rough detail.
{Five}Teddy bear eyes and nose options.
{Six}Lightning colour combinations -page one.
{Seven}Lightning colour combinations -page two.
{Eight}Lightning possible eye colours and detail.
{Nine}Lightning possible nose colour and detail.
{Ten}Rough history and explanation of Lightning's patches.
{Eleven}Lightning patch&repair patterns/swatches.
{Twelve}Lightning patch positioning.

Fiction Factory / We, three beautiful warriors.
« on: October 29, 2019, 01:52:58 AM »

Hoping to write more with NaNo, but we'll see...
Let me know what you think. ~~

Off-Topic: show
I've had this title in my head for the past few days.
During some pondering time, a rough outline is starting to make sense.
My previous thread 'The 'Divide'' is now going to be merged with this story-meaning that it'll be locked and sent to Cryo Chambers. Before I give to much away, I'm going to stop. Hopefully it'll all make sense in the end.


We, three beautiful warriors

The city of Layton had always had some form of divide, which separated it unequally into two.
To begin with, a simple line was enough to stop people stepping across, but it didn't take long to grow in height. Soon, a cobbled brick wall, which towered over most of the buildings on both sides, was constructed.
The divide separated those who were Ďdifferentí, with those that were Ďhumaní.

The two halves were different, in almost every single way apart from one. The one and only rule for both districts, 'Do not visit the other side.'

Phoenix Chronicles / Foundation: -Introduction
« on: October 11, 2019, 04:46:19 PM »
Thread updated: 17th Nov '19.

Off-Topic: show
I decided to create a new thread, with new chapters being lost and unread in the original thread. I didn't want new readers to be swamped, so here goes a new and more active one!
I'm currently reworking every single chapter. I have the original file all printed out, and I'm now retyping it all-fixing mistakes/fixing holes and adding more as I go.
In the o.f, I have up to chapter 14 complete-with a little of ch15, and currently standing just over 50k words.

I'm hoping that NaNo will be a good way to breeze through the re-write, fix-improve-update-and add to, then carry on to the finish.
Please read, and leave feedback where possible! I really need the input from others on this.

Without boring you any longer, here is my current (not so) little writing baby.


School is challenging even at the best of times, but when drastic events happen during your last year, sometimes the only comfort is knowing that your friends are beside you going through the same thing.



:Chapter one: You can't cheat death.
:Chapter two: Unwelcome news.

Completed edits, waiting to post up.

:Chapter three: Spreading the heartbreak.
:Chapter four: Battling authority.
:Chapter five: An uncertain future.
:Chapter six: A temporary beginning.
:Chapter seven: Supportive connections.
:Chapter eight: Remembrance.
:Chapter nine: Saying goodbye.
:Chapter ten: A new home.
:Chapter eleven: Hoping for change.

Completed original, need to edit.
:Chapter twelve: Personal nightmares.
:Chapter thirteen: Outside discussions.
:Chapter fourteen: Seeking answers.

Original draft left here. Work in progress.

:Chapter fifteen: A new trend.

Planned chapter titles, links to be added when chapters are complete.

:Chapter sixteen: Hidden secrets.
:Chapter seventeen: Endless war.
:Chapter eighteen: Broken families.
:Chapter nineteen: Hoping for an escape.
:Chapter twenty: Broken promises.
:Chapter twenty one: Deflated structure.
:Chapter twenty two: Looking for connections.
:Chapter twenty three: The start of something greater.
:Chapter twenty four: Fighting for freedom.
:Chapter twenty five: A new friend.
:Chapter twenty six: Losing the battle.
:Chapter twenty seven: Defeated, but hopeful.
:Chapter twenty eight: Defending the innocent.
:Chapter twenty nine: One last stand.
:Chapter thirty: One last year.
:Chapter thirty one: Joint partnership.
:Chapter thirty two: Searching for help.
:Chapter thirty three: Standing as one.
:Chapter thirty four: Breaking free.

All chapters are listed, but not all are complete. Please read the contents above to find out where I currently am in the story.

August 2005

Lovers Lane / One rule
« on: July 11, 2019, 01:48:03 AM »
I'm not sure what's going to happen with this, it may completely flop. We'll see.

Intro below.

Something's have more of an impact if they are seen, not said aloud. Like the sight of your child winning a race, and seeing their beaming smile as it warms your heart with pride.
Or witching a funny video, a romantic film or scary movie. Explaining the plot is hard to do, and doesn't have the same impact- compared to watching it.
Saying 'goodbye' to a friend follows the same rule. How else will you be able to see them off for the last time?
 The things we say, do and see tie in to one another after all.

I was brought up with one rule.
'Don't become close to any body.'
This is my tale, of how I didn't listen, and how I learned my mistake too late.

Tomeywood / So I watched this movie the other day...
« on: July 07, 2019, 12:07:13 PM »
Off-Topic: show
Another film reviews thread. Doubt it'll be updated too often, don't tend to watch movies that much. It's usually tv shows, and such but figured it would be interesting all the same.

Title: Storks. Watched on Netflix.
Had me and Saint in stitches, totally worth it. The wolves were amazing.
It was so well animated, and funny-well worth the watch if you have the time.

Trailer below:

Poets Promenade / Failing poetry (for giggles and fun..)
« on: July 04, 2019, 01:35:04 PM »
So! -exasperated sighing-

I have a gazzzzzillion scribbles with beginnings of poems/songs that I wrote years ago that are highly unlikely to ever be finished. Either I've been unhappy or just unable to think of where it needs to head next, which has meant they've been left unfinished and gathering dust.

This thread is simply to have some fun.
I'm going to be posting whatever entries I can, and if you can help to complete them (serious or if you make something up purely for fun) then by all means go ahead! I'm open to reading whatever you can think of.

Once I'm happy with the length, I'll copy the poem out as a whole piece and move on to another.

Lets begin shall we!


Forgotten beginning

Shorts Station / Diary of 'Reaper'
« on: July 04, 2019, 12:29:01 PM »
Authors note: This is actually a finished piece, told through short diary entries. It is a >support> piece for Degree of the Human Heart. A prequel of sorts, as it's set before the main story-but the order in which you read isn't important.

.To the believers, the sceptical, the stereotypes and the rules.
.This book is for you.

We are amazing things.

   Let me explain why.

   We can chose to be happy, to let others win. We can plan out days ahead without realising, communicate with each other and make choices.
   Those choices, form our life, from the start to the end that's all we see and all we will ever know.

   We can chose to live how we want, go where we want and act the way we please. And although we sometimes regret it, although we wish that sometimes we could just take the time back, we have already learnt that that can never happen.
   That life is just a one track mind, it will never stop and it will never slow down.

   It's for this reason that I wish to make the most of what I was born with. It's for this reason that I am determined to prove the people who once sought out to hate me wrong.

   I hope you join the journey. The one you will never forget.



NaNoWriMo / Daily post what you write.
« on: July 03, 2019, 04:14:55 PM »

Object here is simple, Camp NaNo for July is here.
I thought it would be fun to create an event where everyone posts (in their own threads so no one gets confused) the words they've written that day- however many that is.

Would be interesting to see how everything develops-even if you're not doing NaNo this year?

What do people think? :thumb:

Phoenix Chronicles / So, what are the 'Phoenix Chronicles'?
« on: March 10, 2019, 02:22:31 PM »
A brief history:

Phoenix Chronicles initially started with a story that I wrote back when I was at school in 2005-6. It was called 'Brother of an Angel', and the main characters were Brendan and Connor Reace.
I introduced several other characters within their story, most of them were their friends.

As I fell in love with some of the extras that I included, I began working on another story 'Will I ever see you again', staring Jamie and Jewel. The same background characters were included, and I began thinking of ways to create stories so that every single one of them would have a main story just like the two I had finished.
Next up, was 'Derelict Cast Off', the main character of that one being Julian Stockwell.
Phoenix Chronicles then began to fit inside my mind, and I started planning the other stories and where they would be placed out.

So when is Phoenix Chronicles based?

The time line of P/C starts from August 2005-July 2006. The same last year that I was in school. The last part of the series is set many years later.

How is the Phoenix Chronicles split up over that period?

P/c is split up as a set of four sections.

Foundation: Introduction
Blueprint: Slander
Buildings: Illusion
Heaven: Knowledge

And what do those titles mean?

Foundation: Introduction sets the groundwork for P/c. It introduces(hence the 'introduction' part) all 34 characters in their own light, and gives a solid 'foundation' for the next part.
Events in Foundation lead into the next section, as well as giving a brief summary of some of the characters important history, and a glimpse into their lives before their own one starts.

Blueprint: Slander is the biggest section of all. Each of the 34 characters has a story to tell. There are 30 stories in Blueprint in all, some of the characters; like Brendan and Connor, and Gregg and Andi are family-and so share their tale where I will be flitting between the different points of view to show the most important part.
Blueprint is the overall title for the section, but each character within it is a part of their own.
Titles in Blueprint will have as their thread name.
'B:S {1} Blinded by colour.'
B:S: to represent 'Blueprint: Slander'
{1}: to list the order it is set within Blueprint.
Blinded by colour: the actual story title.

Buildings: Illusion is set after the majority of the P/c characters leave for that year in May due to exams and study leave. It officially ends when they have their prom night, after all the tests.

Heaven: Knowledge is set around 18 or so years later. This ending gives a final farewell to the group, and a look into how the characters lives turned out. Who stayed with who, what are their families like and such.

What about all the timings up until the last section? How are they spaced throughout the year?

Foundation: Introduction starts officially on: Monday 8th August 2005. It ends Monday 12th September 2005
Blueprint: Slander starts on: Monday 5th September 2005, and ends Friday 19th May 2006.
Buildings: Illusion and Heaven: Knowledge have no current planned start and end dates.

How has the series evolved over time? Has anything changed?

Character name wise, no.
I have had to change quite a bit to fix minor plot points that were weakening the story as a whole. Points that didn't make sense, or as time passed, simply weren't believable any more. I am still planning some areas, and fixing parts that just don't work so it is an ongoing process that has taken many years to fit together, but it's getting there.

Originally some of the series also had quite a lot of violence too, which I have tweaked and changed as I've gone through it all. And, as such, some family dynamics that were in the original drafts are different and -I feel- helps the series as a whole.
By doing so though, it has come with it's own challenges.

Family shifts, especially with attitudes and how the characters have reacted to certain situations have also been thought through more, especially surrounding the events that shape Foundation and Gregg and Andi's story as a whole.

I am only just beginning the series of stories that has been swirling around in my head. And so, if you're interested in reading them, feel free to browse the threads and see what I've posted up!

Phoenix Chronicles / Old vs new drafts.
« on: March 01, 2019, 11:49:51 AM »
I'm not sure how many will be interested in this, but I figured what the heck right?

I've kept versions of previous drafts of some of my stories. Looking back now, it's surprising how rough they were.
The main inspiration/thought for looking through some of them again, is because of the latest updates with Foundation: Introduction.

It has gone through so many changes, at least four or so, and each one -even though it has the same outcome at the end, has a completely different feel.
The current version is one that I can happily say that I'm sticking with. It's such a powerful setup and tragic event, and for a long while I wanted to get the right descriptions to properly tell it as it had played out in my head.
It's why it went through so many drafts. After writing each one I found out, after, that it didn't feel right.

So, this little insight, is going to show you older versions compared to their newer and -hopefully much improved- drafts.
If you're interested, here's what's currently in the thread below:

Foundation: Introduction (2009 draft) Not the absolute first draft, I'll post if I can find it.
Prologue: You can't cheat death.
Foundation: Introduction (2017 draft) Currently working on.
Chapter one: You can't cheat death.

Fiction Factory / Moving Forward
« on: November 04, 2018, 07:05:25 PM »

Lets try this again! I've lost count how many tries it's taken, hopefully this is the last though. I'm determined to finish it this year, and have set a plan out to reach it.
Fingers crossed!

We all have secrets.
Some can be easily hidden from others, and the rest arenít so easily missed.

There are times in life where everything feels like itís suffocating your world, destroying everything inside your mind.
These are the events that shape your future.
The question is, will you be brave and move through these events on your own?

I wasnít.


1: Jake
2: Rachel
3: Ben Link to be added shortly

Work in progress, links to be added when chapters are complete.

4: Sarah

Planned chapter titles.

5: Marie
6: Sam
7: John
8: Abigail
9: Dean
10: Charlotte
11: Holly
12: Lucy

Tome Library / I just finished reading...
« on: October 14, 2018, 02:25:33 PM »
I thought it could be fun to list story's and such that we've finished reading, and give a brief insight. Do you recommend it?
What it worth your time reading?

And, now that you've finished reading, what do you plan on reading next?

Here we go!

Blurb info:

What I plan to read next:
Any reasons why?:

Games / Around the universe.
« on: July 15, 2018, 06:01:52 PM »
The premise of this little game is rather simple. We describe a city, either real or fictional.
It doesn't need to be long at all, just give a brief description.

Towns and cities can be from your imagination, or from real life.

When you're done, add a choice for the next person.
Similar: The next person needs to enter an entry similar to the one you have chosen.
For example: there is a similar theme within the two. Similar landmarks, historical events that have happened in both, shops that are in both towns ect.

Opposite: The next person needs to describe a town, with the complete opposite setting.
For example: say I chose Camelot from the King Arthur realm, and I chose 'opposite'. The next person could then describe a sci-fi orientated city with technology.

The next person then describes that city, and then we carry on from there.

My choice: Windermere, UK.
A beautiful town, by the side of several lakes. Luscious green grass, fields and big open areas to think-draw and write.
Beatrix Potter lived here, and wrote and illustrated several stories in and around her home.

My choice for the next person: Similar.

Fiction Factory / Blindside
« on: July 05, 2018, 11:20:57 PM »

Not entirely sure where this one's headed, just kind of needed to start writing something.
Longer posts in future, hopefully.
Feedback needed

"Beauty does not come from appearances, but is defined and measured by your heart and your choices."


The Lab / Hanah
« on: May 08, 2018, 04:48:44 AM »
I know-I know. I'm so bad for trying to re-write another story. One of these days I'm going to have all the re-writes done*.

Overall, the basis for this story will be completely different. Working in diary form, when I was trying to tell the story was really limiting. I'm trying a new route, with an excerpt from an intro I wrote a while back.
It will be focusing on Hanah and her history more, which makes a lot more sense rather than having it the way it was-which to me now just feels rushed and doesn't fit in. Diaries are meant to be short and sweet, not going into detail of every little thing after all.
Hopefully this is the refresh that this story needs.

*Well, I can live in hope can't I?


   Two little words determined the race of the kingdom; they started a war so great no one was really prepared for it until it was too late. A solitary choice and decision made it sound so simple but thatís so far from the truth.
   I like to believe that if we all had known the choices that everyone had made all those years ago, then so many people would been spared.
   With all the technology around itís easy to go back and stop what happened, but itís forbidden to do so.

   We just have to hope that the mistakes wonít repeat themselves once more, after all-civilisation is so fragile now.


1: Late night scare.

Phoenix Chronicles / Character profiles:
« on: May 04, 2018, 09:21:41 PM »
I've seen this done a few times, and the results are really entertaining, and serves as an added bonus for anybody reading the story-as you will get to learn more about the specific individuals.

I'll likely be adding in characters from my other stories on here too, not just for 'PC', so you may want to keep your eyes open.

I've started them in a different way, it's based more on a question and answer rather system so it's somewhat easy to follow.
Enough rambling, here's the profiles!

Julian Stockwell

Shorts Station / Breathe..
« on: April 13, 2018, 01:54:23 AM »
I'm not entirely sure where this ones headed, which is why I've put it in shorts..that way i can update when i have things to post.

Spacing is intentional.
Read the first line of the paragraphs, or all to get better context.

Let's begin!


Shorts Station / Phoenix's writing prompts thread: Long and short
« on: January 25, 2018, 08:01:45 PM »
To keep myself motivated, I've been trying to work through the daily writing prompts thread to find ones that I can work through and write.
Some are bound to be shorter than others, but I'm not entirely sure how often I'll be updating this thread so you should have time to catch up before the next one gets posted.


Create a monster, who is afraid of itself
-Write- >Draw< the saddest scene you can muster.

Tome Library / Need story feedback?
« on: December 13, 2017, 05:08:46 PM »
Okay, so I have a little bit of time over the next week or so, so I am starting to catch up with topics and that on the forum. I just wondered if there were any topics that people specifically wanted me to read?

I'm going to go through them gradually, but if you want feedback for stories by a specific date, then let me know so I can prioritise it  :read:

Anyway, include links where possible, and I'll hope to hear from you soon!  :lovedance:

The Concert Hall / What do you like listening to when you write?
« on: December 11, 2017, 01:55:45 AM »
I'm actually really surprised this hasn't been a thread yet  (:whaaa:...)

What do you prefer to listen to? Writing or otherwise.
I personally prefer a mixture of different artists, usually Two steps from Hell or something similar.
Here's one of my favourite songs;

Or, failing that something a little more electronic..(but very calming and happy)

So, what do you listen to? Post the links below!  :lovedance:

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